The Invisible Man

I waited patiently at the edge of the lonely street for my next victim.

This would be my tenth robbery in as many days, they’d even given me a name- The Invisible Man. Unimaginative, but apt, for I had indeed discovered a formula that made me invisible, and was now using it for the greatest of goods…mine!

Suddenly, I saw my next target. A man, mousy, bespectacled, wearing a suit, carrying a suitcase, alone.

I walked confidently up to him, for he obviously couldn’t see me. I balled my fist to clobber him and take his suitcase, when he suddenly looked straight at me, whipped out a revolver, and said, “You’re under arrest.”

“But….but….but….I am invisible,” I cried out.

I almost melted with shame and humiliation as he removed his spectacles, put them on my face, and said, “You need these more than I do, for you forgot to see one critical thing- the street is covered with snow, and even if I can’t see you, I can see your footprints.”

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175 words.

Happy holidays folks. I’ve tried something different today- combining two different challenges and writing a story based on both of them. The details of the challenges are given below:

Sunday Photo Fiction, hosted by Al Forbes. The challenge was to write a story of around 200 words based on the photo prompt of the snow-filled street given above. For more details visit HERE. To read more stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, hosted by Priceless Joy. The challenge was to write a flash fiction story in 175 words or less, based on the weekly photo prompt given above (the second pic, of the melted face with spectacles). For more details, visit HERE. To read the other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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18 Responses to The Invisible Man

  1. James says:

    I love “Invisible Man” stories but they all suffer from the same flaw: blindness. If light either went around or passed through a person, that would include their eyes. Yet for us to see, light must strike the back of the eye and be reflected forward. H.G. Wells got around this problem by saying there was a bit of color in his invisible man’s eyes that let him see, yet you’d never detect it unless you were looking right at his face and he were perfectly still.

    I wrote a “realistic” invisible man story once where the person’s power was psychic. He mentally erased his presence from any mind around him. He even committed a murder that way. He forgot however that cameras and other electronic sensing devices would be unaffected.

  2. Hahahaha! Love the ending! Of course he could see the footsteps – it had snowed! LOL! Great story!

  3. Michael says:

    The footprints will give you away everytime..good response.

  4. Shivangi says:

    Loved this take. Never thought the invisible man would get caught!

  5. How clever, Anurag. It’s a mini mystery. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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