Just Hanging Out

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Photo prompt courtesy Jilly Funell

It hadn’t been easy to persuade Mary Jane to hang with me at the tower, but the priceless expression on her face made it all worth it.

“What a view, eh?” I asked nervously. Small talk with girls was not one of my strong suits.

She just nodded silently.

“Very soon, you will see the most gorgeous sunset of your life,” I continued, as she stared over the city skyline.

“So, if I were you,” I whispered gently as she struggled to hang on to the railing, “I would pray that Spider-Man doesn’t come to rescue you before that.”

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99 words.

Written as a part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The objective is to write a story in 100 words or less, inspired by the weekly photo prompt.To read many more stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

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About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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44 Responses to Just Hanging Out

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Excellent twist as always 🙂

  2. neilmacdon says:

    Read a different way, she ought to pray for a superhero to rescue her

  3. pennygadd51 says:

    Not quite what the operators of the Spinnaker Tower had in mind as “The Drop”. Dark, dark story Anurag.

  4. draliman says:

    It would be a shame to be rescued right before experiencing the most gorgeous sunset of her life… 🙂

  5. Abhijit Ray says:

    What is he up to? Why would spider man need to rescue Mary Jane? Does he plan to push her off the tower?

  6. Dear Anurag,

    I can’t help wonder what’s going through Mary Jane’s mind at this point. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  7. Now I can see why she was reluctant. Evidently, he’s no smoother at romance than he is at small talk.

  8. I wouldn’t want to hang with him either. Poor Mary Jane.

  9. 4963andypop says:

    Not the view she was expecting to see I bet! Nice way to turn a casual date by a nerdy guy into a bone-tingling bit of suspense!

  10. James McEwan says:

    I expect you don’t want to let go of this girl – or have a falling out, then again who is going to drop who. How long into the date did she realise he was batty? When the sun sets on the horizon will she be able to escape his web of deceit? If I was her I would not hang out with him again, does she not realise the gravity of the situation? Damn, Issac Newton.

  11. granonine says:

    Good grief. How does this kind of psycho cover up who he really is long enough to lure a victim to a grisly death!

  12. plaridel says:

    i think she could handle herself very well. it was he who should watch out for her next move. 🙂

  13. michael1148humphris says:

    Hang on girl, help is on its way, now that we know the situation.

  14. jillyfunnell says:

    Clever distraction technique with the aside about small talk. Good story.

  15. Sandra says:

    He never will become a smooth talker if he keeps killing them off.

  16. I think that Mary Jane is really Spider Woman… watch out murderous creep.

  17. Laurie Bell says:

    Aha!! Terrific twist… green goblin perhaps? A fun piece

  18. lisarey1990 says:

    Your twist is as always great!

  19. Hopefully, won’t be her last sunset.

  20. I’m with Fatima … I hope the sunset isn’t her last.
    Great writing … I always enjoy a story with a twist at the end.
    Isadora 😎

  21. Wow! This is really good. 🙂 So glad I read it. Thanks for visiting
    Debbie

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