Mr. Perfect

Carmen looked at the figure approaching from a distance, and then at her watch. Yes, it was definitely Justin, he was NEVER late.

Photo prompt courtesy Enisa

The watch….It had been a gift from Justin, just like everything in this plush apartment. The jewelry, the cash, the perfumes, the designer clothes. He had a taste for the finer things in life, and had never skimped from sharing them with those he loved.

And he had loved her, with all his heart and soul, for three long years that they had been together. This apartment, and everything in it, was proof of that.

And today, he was going to propose, she just knew it in her bones. The signs were all there: the furtive movements, the nervous giggles, and the diamond ring that she had discovered in his drawer.

Almost breathless with excitement now, she waited for him to enter the apartment. His reaction as he saw his wife standing over the body of his mistress, the one he had set up in this apartment, would be priceless indeed!


175 words.

Written as a part of Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, the weekly challenge hosted by Priceless Joy. The objective is to write a story in 175 words or less based on the weekly photo prompt. For more information visit HERE. To read other stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.



About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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21 Responses to Mr. Perfect

  1. Fandango says:

    Nice twist at the end. I did not see that coming.

  2. Natasha says:

    Oooooooooooohhhh blimey!!! That’s a hard hitting twist.
    You are quite a pro at twists Anurag, aren’t you.

  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Good twist this one, well done!

  4. shivamt25 says:

    Hehe! Nice twist! Did not expect that at all!

  5. draliman says:

    Master of the final twist! You should have “twisted tales” as your tagline 🙂

  6. Great surprise twist at the end! I love it! Revenge is sweet. LOL! Great story, Anuragbakhshi.

  7. Wow! Didn’t see that one coming…well done!

  8. yarnspinnerr says:

    A perfect ending for flash.

  9. Sarah Ann says:

    Hmm, I don’t think he’s going to be as pleased as she thinks. A great unforeseen twist.

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