I looked up at my cottage in dread.
PHOTO PROMPT © Karen Rawson
When I had left last evening to get dinner from the market 30 kilometers away, I had not known that I would be involved in a car accident, and lose consciousness for so long.
I had rushed back as soon as I woke up, but was I already too late? Rachel had been alone and hungry for almost 24 hours now.
The thought put spurs on my feet, and I started running up the rough, broken stairs. I could kiss the ransom money goodbye if I did not deliver Rachel alive to her husband.
*************************************************************************************100 words.
Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The objective is to write a short story of 100 words or less based on the photo prompt given above. To read many more amazing stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.
jagahdilmein 
Great story
Thank you so much
Brilliant story with great suspense.
Thank you so much Lisa
A kidnapping gone wrong! What an imaginative take on the prompt. Just one suggeston – avoid the use of “had”. It distances the reader. You could just as easily use “When I left last evening”
Aah nice, thanks.
I wonder how Rachel will be returned to her hubby without a car? This kidnapper has a bit of a problem methinks!
My FriFic tale is called Solace!
Eggjaktly. Thank you so much Keith
As Neil says, imaginative take on the prompt! I hope for all their sakes poor Rachel survived the night. Great story
Thank you so much Lynn
My pleasure
Wow – I wasn’t expecting that! Great take on the photo prompt.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thank you so much Susan
Just not his day, is it? And how will he get her to her husband without his car? It serves him right.
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much Sandra
The best laid plans, it was all going so well too! 🙂
Thank you so much Iain.
These kidnappers never seem to plan for all contingencies, do they? Like with a pet, he could have asked his neighbours to pop in and feed his captive if he didn’t make it back on time 🙂
Now that’s too funny.
Randy
Ha ha ha ha ha
I hate when I do bad things and then things go wrong.
Causes too much more anxiety to the already existing anxiety.
Ha.
Randy
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much Randy
Even the best laid plans for a crime fail to take into account these random interruptions — what a perfectly bad time for a car accident!
Thank you so much Joy
My Goodness, what if he was killed in the accident! Poor Rachel. A nice thriller in such a few words.
Thank you so much James
There is something double tragic with a failing criminals… somehow I’m reminded of the movie “Ruthless People”…
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much Bjorn
Dear Anurag,
Ha! What a misdirect. You have me feeling sorry for this guy until the end. What a creep. Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you so much Rochelle
Interesting twist! And ironic! Well done! 😉
Thank you so much Courtney
What a great story, Anurag. Like Rochelle said, what a fabulous misdirect.
Loved this very original take…
Thank you so much Dale
You got us all thinking at first that he cared about this Rachel. Nice twist in end👍
Thank you so much Shivam
Why am I feeling sorry for this kidnapper? You write this as if he really is concerned for Rachel, although it’s just the money. Hopefully his time away has enabled her to escape, or at least fashion some weapon to greet him with.
Let’s hope so. Thank you so much Sarah Ann
Lovely twist at the end! You took me completely by surprise!
Thank you so much Penny
So potentially this biter has been bitten. I like the way you name the hostage and I hope she escapes to give a clear description of him and get him locked up. Good story.
Thank you so much Jilly
You are most welcome, Anurag. Very best wishes, Jilly
I had to read it twice… good one Anurag..l wonder where you get these ideas from
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much Akshata. I have no idea 🙂
I was feeling all sympathetic for the fellow, only to discover he was the kidnapper!
Thank you so much
Great twist. That killed our sympathy for him.
Thank you so much Russell
Hah, what a great twist. I hope, for Rachel’s sake, that she is still alive. But he sure can kiss more than the ransom money good-bye.
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much
This is so good—the suspense is killing me 🙂
Ha ha ha. Thank you so much
So unexpected. You had us worried for the kidnapper – lets hope Rachel survived for reasons other than that he would lose the ransom money.
Thank you so much Irene