The Accident

I looked up at my cottage in dread.

PHOTO PROMPT © Karen Rawson

When I had left last evening to get dinner from the market 30 kilometers away, I had not known that I would be involved in a car accident, and lose consciousness for so long.

I had rushed back as soon as I woke up, but was I already too late? Rachel had been alone and hungry for almost 24 hours now.

The thought put spurs on my feet, and I started running up the rough, broken stairs. I could kiss the ransom money goodbye if I did not deliver Rachel alive to her husband.

*************************************************************************************100 words.

Written as part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The objective is to write a short story of 100 words or less based on the photo prompt given above. To read many more amazing stories based on this week’s prompt, visit HERE.

About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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55 Responses to The Accident

  1. lisarey1990 says:

    Brilliant story with great suspense.

  2. neilmacdon says:

    A kidnapping gone wrong! What an imaginative take on the prompt. Just one suggeston – avoid the use of “had”. It distances the reader. You could just as easily use “When I left last evening”

  3. I wonder how Rachel will be returned to her hubby without a car? This kidnapper has a bit of a problem methinks!

    My FriFic tale is called Solace!

  4. Lynn Love says:

    As Neil says, imaginative take on the prompt! I hope for all their sakes poor Rachel survived the night. Great story

  5. Wow – I wasn’t expecting that! Great take on the photo prompt.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  6. Sandra says:

    Just not his day, is it? And how will he get her to her husband without his car? It serves him right.

  7. Iain Kelly says:

    The best laid plans, it was all going so well too! 🙂

  8. draliman says:

    These kidnappers never seem to plan for all contingencies, do they? Like with a pet, he could have asked his neighbours to pop in and feed his captive if he didn’t make it back on time 🙂

  9. I hate when I do bad things and then things go wrong.
    Causes too much more anxiety to the already existing anxiety.
    Ha.
    Randy

  10. Joy Pixley says:

    Even the best laid plans for a crime fail to take into account these random interruptions — what a perfectly bad time for a car accident!

  11. James McEwan says:

    My Goodness, what if he was killed in the accident! Poor Rachel. A nice thriller in such a few words.

  12. There is something double tragic with a failing criminals… somehow I’m reminded of the movie “Ruthless People”…

  13. Dear Anurag,

    Ha! What a misdirect. You have me feeling sorry for this guy until the end. What a creep. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  14. Interesting twist! And ironic! Well done! 😉

  15. Dale says:

    What a great story, Anurag. Like Rochelle said, what a fabulous misdirect.
    Loved this very original take…

  16. shivamt25 says:

    You got us all thinking at first that he cared about this Rachel. Nice twist in end👍

  17. Sarah Ann says:

    Why am I feeling sorry for this kidnapper? You write this as if he really is concerned for Rachel, although it’s just the money. Hopefully his time away has enabled her to escape, or at least fashion some weapon to greet him with.

  18. pennygadd51 says:

    Lovely twist at the end! You took me completely by surprise!

  19. jillyfunnell says:

    So potentially this biter has been bitten. I like the way you name the hostage and I hope she escapes to give a clear description of him and get him locked up. Good story.

  20. Akshata Ram says:

    I had to read it twice… good one Anurag..l wonder where you get these ideas from

  21. k rawson says:

    I was feeling all sympathetic for the fellow, only to discover he was the kidnapper!

  22. Great twist. That killed our sympathy for him.

  23. gahlearner says:

    Hah, what a great twist. I hope, for Rachel’s sake, that she is still alive. But he sure can kiss more than the ransom money good-bye.

  24. granonine says:

    This is so good—the suspense is killing me 🙂

  25. So unexpected. You had us worried for the kidnapper – lets hope Rachel survived for reasons other than that he would lose the ransom money.

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