Just in Time – #AtoZChallenge #BlogchatterA2Z

I was dying, and there was nothing I could do about it.

Lying alone on a cot in my ramshackle hut, I tried calling out to my husband and kids in my delirious state, and then I remembered…

If only I could gather enough strength to get up and cook something up, maybe there was still a chance for me.


Who was I fooling? There was nothing to cook. The famine had eaten up everything.

The hunger was gnawing me from inside now, as if it would carve out every last bit of flesh left on my stomach. I knew I wouldn’t last the night.

And then, suddenly, there was a knock on the door, and a child’s voice asked hesitantly, “Excuse me, but we have lost our way. Can you please help us?”

“Come on in, the door is open,” I replied in a weak voice.

And as the boy and his sister entered the hut, the board outside the hut was blank no more.

It said:


Hansel & Gretel.


175 words.

This is the third and final chapter of my retelling of Hansel & Gretel. You can read the first part here (https://jagahdilmein.wordpress.com/2018/01/18/the-happiest-day-of-my-life/) and the second part here (https://jagahdilmein.wordpress.com/2018/02/06/the-cleaner/).

Written as a part ofΒ Flash Fiction for Aspiring WritersΒ hosted by Priceless Joy. The challenge is to write a story based on the weekly photo prompt in 175 words or less.

Also my submission for #AtoZChallenge and #BlogchatterA2Z. Today’s alphabet was J, which, in my story, stands for Just in Time.


About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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30 Responses to Just in Time – #AtoZChallenge #BlogchatterA2Z

  1. Deb Whittam says:

    Love it – quite a different slant on the popular fairy tale

  2. Akshata Ram says:

    Thought as much! You have a thing for Hansel and Gretel- I remember another story about a fair that kids go to also had Hansel and Gretel there. Nicely done though Anurag!

  3. Nice rewrite of an old fairy tale.

  4. Balaka says:

    Did she cook them up?? That is quite a grotesque food. Love the twist in the tale.

  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Even without the last lines, I was sure where this was heading. A Grim(m) tale indeed!

  6. Em says:

    That was one surprising ending. Loved it.

  7. Wow, what a chilling and surprise ending! Great story!! Well done!

  8. Varad says:

    Delightfully sinister, Anurag. Two thumbs up πŸ‘πŸ‘

  9. Deliciously terrible! πŸ™‚

  10. Lavanya says:

    Nice re-telling of Hansel & gretel. Loved it!

  11. Dark, but very much enjoyed.
    Great Post,

  12. yarnspinnerr says:

    Quite a take.Enjoyed this read.

  13. Meha Sharma says:

    What a chilling twist there! I read the last part first, I guess but will still hop on to the previous ones. Good job Anurag!

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