The Happiest Day of My Life

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

Father took us to the fair today, and for the first time since Mum died, we felt truly happy.

We rode on the Merry-go-round ten times. Father let us ride as much as we wanted. He says we’ll come again once the famine is over. Our new mom will also be with us then. I don’t think she likes us much. But Father says she has told him to take us for a walk in the forest tomorrow morning, so maybe she is not that bad after all.

Gretel and I are very excited about tomorrow’s walk.

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97 words.

Written as a part of the Friday Fictioneers challenge, hosted by the inimitable Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (more details HERE). The objective is to write a short story of 100 words or less based on the photo prompt given above (This week’s photo courtesy J. Hardy Carroll.)

To read other stories from this week’s challenge, visit HERE.

 

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About anuragbakhshi

At the age of 40, I decided to exit the corporate world, and enter the world of stories as a full-time writer. Wish me luck!
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57 Responses to The Happiest Day of My Life

  1. Akshata Ram says:

    Super loved this! This is the best I read today Anurag

  2. Alice Audrey says:

    Great last line. Proves the foreboding nicely.

  3. draliman says:

    Ooh, it started to get a bit ominous and then that great last line!

  4. neilmacdon says:

    It was beginning to dawn on me at the penultimate line. And then the sucker punch of the last line, Beautifully executed!

  5. Sandra says:

    Oh dear, this won’t be ending well at all…

  6. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice reveal – does this story end the same as the original version?!

    • I have absolutely no idea. The next step would have to be the same, the father leaving them in the forest at the behest of their stepmother. After that, the story will change depending upon who is writing it and what comes to them at that time. We don’t control stories, stories control us 🙂

  7. Hi Anurag! That´s an interesting connection there to the fairy tale. That was different. Keep writing and Cheers 🙂

  8. rgayer55 says:

    Ah, the wicked step-mother theme. It’s easy to get lost in those woods.

  9. Ah you got me! I didn’t see that twist coming. Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  10. k rawson says:

    Beware the gingerbread houses! Entertaining story and such a twist.

  11. pennygadd51 says:

    A nice cheerful start to Hansel and Gretel. I hope they are as resourceful as the original children!

  12. Dear Anurag,

    Love it! I laughed out loud at the last line. Very clever.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  13. LOL. Well done. Great twist. Oh if only we could warn them.

  14. Natasha says:

    Woaaah who would have thought those kids were our Hansel and Gretel! Fabulous one Anurag.

  15. Well, that last line really came as a surprise! A delightfully different take.

    Click to read my FriFic!

  16. Joy Pixley says:

    Ha ha, as soon as I read the “walk in the forest” bit, I feared the worst — great twist!

  17. Well done. You can keep your tale short since we all know where it’s headed.

  18. Nice twist, very enjoyable read! =)

  19. Moon says:

    Wow! I wasn’t familiar till I was. Wonderful storytelling, Anurag.

  20. Dale says:

    Oh dear. Why oh why do step-mothers always have to be so evil? And the fathers so milquetoast?

  21. Oh never trust a step mother in the forest…

  22. plaridel says:

    poor stepmother! she doesn’t have clue. the kids are smarter than she gives them credit to.

  23. michael1148humphris says:

    What a string in the tale, I do hope that these kids turn the table on their new step mother

  24. Dan Bohn says:

    Oh nooo, the ending was so twisted,,, in a good way.

  25. Lynn Love says:

    Ah, very clever! A killer reveal in that last line. Well done

  26. That was a great ending twist, Anurag. I wasn’t expecting it. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

  27. tidalscribe says:

    Brilliant, not many words are needed to produce such a shock.

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